Here is the view of Ray Nelson, author of American publishing legend. In the beginning: I like it … the flashbacks premature Hint: Do not mention the past before I am concerned about this. I like … no action or dialogue in a vacuum: Suggestion: tell me from the beginning where we are, inside or outside, the place, people, important objects, doors , windows, stairs, furniture to be used, and especially the important accessories, which is crucial: how the scene is illuminated. I like the characters …
not that I can not see: Suggestion: immediately after the character has entered the scene, start by telling me her age, gender, class, manners, race, physical … Give me the news gradually, not suddenly. And you arrange for me to know how the character is dressed. I like Abidbol … not in this narration. Suggestion: Even if some modern writers use it, he pays the consequences for featuring it.
Satisfy yourself with a simple past unless you have a good reason. In the middle: I like … not emotional tone inconsistent. Hint: if you start on a comic tone, continue on a comic tone. It’s not scary, it becomes one more. If it’s tragic, it is tragic. Can be contrasted emotions but not totally change his tone. I like it … missed opportunities. Suggestion: make the most of any promise set the reader. And the stage resolution is in the middle of the stage, not off the field after the end of the story.